Silent tears born
Of unrequited love.
Nurtured dreams torn
Wounded pride begotten.
A smiling mask
Concealing grief,
Biting agony and
Insult, unbearably brief.
Consequences,
Delightfully morbid,
Innocent pretensions
Vanishing,
Wisdom now acquired.
Beautiful moments burnt,
An illegitimate past stolen,
Nonchalant present bequeathed
A bleak future woven.
Trust’s cold blooded death,
Illusive mirage-her faith.
Feigned camaraderie sported,
Convincing deceiver rewarded.
9 comments:
Very well written. And i know what this is about so, yeah i can understand too..
thanks, josh! i really think its quite a lame effort though! after learning poetry in oe classes and discovering the meaning behind words like "rhyme" and "metre", this really seems like a shoddy job. but hey, i am not complaining. bring in the compliments, ppl! and abt the significance and context of the poem... it's a means of getting rid of the past, i guess... and hey, i am taking your advice seriously. i am trying!! kudos! LOL... but, what do you think abt the last stanza? i feel, its quite harsh... is it?
A POET IN THE MAKING>>>>
LOoKs LiKe ItS StRaIgHt fROm Ur hEaRT...Thou IM nOT GOod at ThESE(PoEtRY N StUFF).. BuT StIl i AgRee WiD ThEse LiNes OF Urs ExCePT FeR SOmE Of Em!!!
BuT iTS ReaLlY COoL NuN ThE LEsS..ITs AlWaYs Good To LEt UR EmOtioNs FlOw...EsPeCialLLy Wen U R HiGh Or loW...FEels GOod to PEn IT dOwN..NICe THaT U AVE ChaNilSEd UR FEelIngs InTo CrEaTiViTy...ITs RaRe TO FiNd PpL WhO ReaLlY crEatE OR RaThEr MakE SOmEoNe ActUaLlY GeT tHe Feel oF uR EmOtiOns..N U AvE DoNe IT rEaLlY Wel...Now I KnOw WhAt u AcTuaLlY Feel ....!!!! ANyWAyS KeeP iT gOiN GAl...TrES BiEn!!..MaGnIfIQuE!!.:)
hi
A POET IN THE MAKING>>>>
LOoKs LiKe ItS StRaIgHt fROm Ur hEaRT...Thou IM nOT GOod at ThESE(PoEtRY N StUFF).. BuT StIl i AgRee WiD ThEse LiNes OF Urs ExCePT FeR SOmE Of Em!!!
BuT iTS ReaLlY COoL NuN ThE LEsS..ITs AlWaYs Good To LEt UR EmOtioNs FlOw...EsPeCialLLy Wen U R HiGh Or loW...FEels GOod to PEn IT dOwN..NICe THaT U AVE ChaNilSEd UR FEelIngs InTo CrEaTiViTy...ITs RaRe TO FiNd PpL WhO ReaLlY crEatE OR RaThEr MakE SOmEoNe ActUaLlY GeT tHe Feel oF uR EmOtiOns..N U AvE DoNe IT rEaLlY Wel...Now I KnOw WhAt u AcTuaLlY Feel ....!!!! ANyWAyS KeeP iT gOiN GAl...TrES BiEn!!..MaGnIfIQuE!!.:)
thanks bala! it feels good to know that you liked it. really!
@ the anonymous person!
hi back to you! it would be nice to know who you are, you know.
lol... thank you thank you thank you... good to see you've finally created a blog here, adi? but, where are the posts? what happened to your decision of writing a story on two bong girls and a bong guy?
thanks romy!
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